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Stormy Water's Adventure In The Rainbow Factory

Disclaimer!-I don't own MLP:FiM,the original Fanfic,or the Song.This is just an OC story that is a fanfic to that fanfic to that song to that show.Caution!There is a small bit of gore later in this story!
Stormy Water(or Storm for short) flapped her wings rapidly,beads of sweat forming on her dark grey brow.Soar,her new pet Barn Owl,flew along side her.Soar was better experienced with flying,so she could've been up and away.But Soar was rescued from certain death by Storm,and she had to repay her.You see,Storm was chased out of her home and is now being hunted down by her father,and at the worst possible time in her life:before Storm could be taught to fly!Now,after 2 weeks of hard practice,Storm can now fly a few miles...but she wasn't really that good yet....
"That's it,Storm!Flap those wings!"Soar chirped happily,her tan feathers shining in the afternoon sun."Cloudsdale is just a mile or two away! "Storm nodded and whinnied heavily.She was pretty tired.She felt a little dust brush past her face,and she closed her eyes.The silver fangs surgically attached to her original pony canines twinkled brightly as the sun hit them.Storm felt herself float downward.She perked back up and resumed her rapid wing flaps.
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"Wow....Cloudsdale..."Storm whispered in awe.So many rainbows streaked across the sky.Puffy clouds cushioned her aching hooves.Storm quietly trotted along,watching the multicolored winged ponies streak across the sky.But little did she know that she was being watched.Glowing magenta eyes watched her buff figure.The eyes wandered up and down her body,glancing at the gorgeous icy blue stripes in her mane and tail,the emerald green in her eyes,the orange spear handle on her cutie mark....The sky-blue Pegasus sneered and gently made her way towards the weak-winged newcomer.
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"Oh,you scared me!"Storm giggled happily,pleased to finally meet someone like her.Soar chuckled as well."Oh,it's fine.Just excited to see our new member of Cloudsdale,is all!"The blue pony replied.Stormy Water beamed at her new friend."My name's Stormy Water,but you can call me Storm."Storm chirped."The name's Rainbow Dash."The other pony replied,just as cheerfully.
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Soar churred happily."Rainbow Dash was so nice to offer you a chance to see how rainbows are made."Storm nodded in agreement as they followed Rainbow Dash to a small,closed wagon."You get to make one too,Storm.Fun,huh?"Dash added.Storm did a small happy hop.Never had she met a pony this nice!
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The corridor was a dark path of mystery.Storm looked about her nervously.She could feel eyes stinging into her coat.Soar churred again and ruffled her feathers.But Rainbow Dash seemed as calm as could be.Soar murmured to Storm,"Storm...my feathers feel stiff."This was Tyto Alba code for:'I feel that danger is near...'But Storm smiled back at the Barn Owl."It's OK,Soar.I'm here to protect you if anything goes wrong."Soar smiled weakly at Storm.Suddenly,Storm stopped.Rainbow Dash trotted onward,not realizing Storm fell back.Soar tilted her head in a confused manner.But then,Soar turned her head to the right just as Storm did....and she suddenly wished she hadn't.Before them was a young vermillion-colored Pegasus who was hooked to a machine by his arms and legs....with his ribs ripped out of his sides and broken.Storm's maw was open in a silent scream.Soar whimpered.The little pony was suddenly pounded and torn to shreds...Storm backed away,but she suddenly crashed into Rainbow Dash.Storm's iris' shank,and she let out a blood-curling scream.With that,Soar screeched,"Storm!FLY!"Storm thrusted her wings with fiery determination,and managed to take off.Rainbow Dash only smiled.Her assistants zoomed past her and after the grey Pegasus.Storm whined as she tried to fly faster,to escape as Soar could easily do.Soar glanced back at her with fear in her lemon-colored orbs.The blood-stained pegasi flew closer,a chain lasso ready for Storm's neck."Storm,run!Fight!BE THE STORM!"Soar cawed.Storm then narrowed her eyes and used her weather manipulation powers.3 clouds,black as ebony,shoot in.With a clap of thunder and lightning,a raging flood of water came over the three evil assistants.Storm sighed.She was safe.Or was she?Storm heard a jingling sound and suddenly,the chain wrapped around her neck.She was yanked to the ground."Ahh!NO!"She cried as a deranged Rainbow Dash carried her off,back to her doom.But suddenly,Soar reappeared with a fierce screech,an army of Tyto Albas with shining battle claws appeared,and attacked Rainbow Dash.She screamed as she was scratched,and blood poured from her face and shoulders.Storm raced off. "Fall back,you lot!Before she can recover!"she ordered.Soar screeched and flew after her,as well as the army.They rushed out of the gates and away from the factory,hoping with all their hearts that they would never see a rainbow again...
FIN
The Rainbow Factory fanfic/song isn't mine!
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Gromf007 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm not sure if I either want to hug Aurora really tight or punch her in the face and then write a really graphic story about it. I joined the fandom, I wanted to feel like a child, ignoring how depressive life feels and then comes someone like this and says that Tooth fairy isn't real and Santa Claus rapes everything I love every wednesday afternoon. These stories are what ruins the brony community. Thank you all, job always well done.
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Flare2266 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh...Ok,then. Thanks for commenting...
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Gromf007 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Now that I'm not under affect of feels I got from reading sad stories... I'm sorry. You are artists and you really are good, I just had to tell someone. Thanks for writing this story, it's awesome.
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Flare2266 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome,sweetie. Thank you for reading.
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Kabutomania Featured By Owner May 5, 2013
Creepy hmmm... Did you hapen to read the guardians of ga-hool series? Because that owl or "soar" is quite close to "soaren" from the book which is also a barn owl but is hunted by his brother.
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snowstarofrippleclan Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  New member
I thought so.... The tyto Alba and the battle claws.... I like the series too, yay IM NOT ALONE!!!
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Flare2266 Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes.I love that series,although I really like the movie too.The book inspiered me to create Soar.
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Kabutomania Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
:D
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Jolterane Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Digital Artist
O_0
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